“I was angry.”
Those three small words seem innocuous enough, don’t they? Plain and straightforward, they convey the basic emotion of anger. But they also flatten that feeling, rendering it one-dimensional on the page. As writers, we can do so much better than that.
Instead, imagine this:
“My teeth ground together as heat rushed to my face. I balled my fists so tightly, fingernails biting into my palms, fighting the urge to sweep everything off the table onto the floor.”
In just one sentence, you are swept up in the visceral physicality of anger—the jaw clenching, the racing blood, the white-knuckle tension. You don’t just know the narrator is angry, you can vividly picture and feel that anger yourself.
That’s the magic of having learned to show, not tell, in your writing. Rather than serving up an emotion or concept for your reader to swallow like dry toast, you engage all five of their senses. You involve their imagination in constructing the scene. In short, you make them active participants in your story rather than passive observers.
This principle of “showing” over “telling” is one of the golden rules of writing. And for good reason – stories that “show” represent the difference between writing that is alive and extraordinary versus “tell” that is dull and forgettable.
Let’s explore exactly why this rule is so critical, and how you can start mastering the art of showing in your own work.
Why “Showing” Works: Making Readers Equal Partners in Your Story
One of the primary reasons “showing” resonates so much more powerfully than “telling” comes down to the way it engages your audience. Consider this passage:
“Angela felt frustrated that her husband John wasn’t listening to her. She thought men were selfish and only cared about themselves.”
Did you roll your eyes just a little reading that? I know I did. While it conveys some key plot points—marital tension, resentment between the spouses—the writing puts you at arm’s length from the scene. It’s like having someone recount a fight between two people neither of you know—the stakes are low, and the details are sparse.
Now let’s see what “showing” that scenario might look like:
“Angela stabbed the TV remote control, mashing the mute button with her thumb as John rambled on about his promotion at work. For once, she wished he would zip his fat lip and let her get a word in edgewise. But he was too busy crowing like a rooster in a henhouse. Typical man, always tooting his own horn.”
With those few short sentences, you’ve been invited into Angela’s living room. You hear the blare of the TV in the background, the aggressive mute button click carrying Angela’s irritation. You picture her eyes rolling, her foot tapping impatiently through John’s boastful tirade. Phrases like “rambled on,” “tooting his own horn,” and “crowing like a rooster” paint a vivid picture of John’s oblivious self-absorption all while revealing Angela’s growing annoyance.
What’s more, you’ve been treated to a juicy glimpse into her inner landscape through that brief line of bitter commentary – “Typical man, always tooting his own horn.” In one lean, incisive phrase, her resentment toward her husband is laid bare along with her perhaps outdated attitudes about gender differences.
That terse “show” paragraph has done more to engage you with these characters than the preceding “tell” summary could ever hope to achieve. It sparks your imagination, inviting you to picture the scene for yourself, to make judgments, to ask questions.
You are suddenly an active participant in this fictional world, no longer a passive bystander.
This dynamic lies at the heart of why showing is so effective. A telling narrative is like a used car salesperson listing off features (“power windows, keyless entry, satellite radio”) whereas a showing narrative is like taking the car out for an extended test drive yourself. When your audience is able to experience scenes in such immediate, multisensory detail, they become more invested in the lives and journeys of your characters. Their imaginations have been stirred, and now they’re hooked.
How to Show Every Human Experience
“But how do you actually go about translating that abstract ‘show don’t tell’ advice into practice on the page?” you may be wondering.
The key is to train yourself to invoke as much sensory detail and imagery as possible whenever you’re describing something. Rather than stating “she felt angry,” dive into the observable physical cues that manifest her anger:
Her cheeks flushed as heat pricked the back of her neck. She slammed her palms flat on the kitchen counter, sending a carton of eggs clattering across the tile floor.
If you’re portraying a memory, work to recount specific details about that moment in time – what sounds, scents, flavors, or tactile sensations were present:
The classroom didn’t smell like floor wax and chalk like it usually did, but of sweat and soil. The coppery bite of blood was all I could taste as I raised my fist, knuckles split and stinging. Even now, nearly three decades later, one whiff of that red rubber ball could transport me back to trading blows behind the baseball diamond and hearing Coach Thomas’s whistle piercing the hot April air.
Notice how that last memory-based example makes you feel like you were right there in the boyhood flashback? That’s the power of showing—of not just dropping readers into the scene through sights and sounds, but fully immersing them in all the involuntary sensory details that crowd such potent emotional moments.
You can use showing to heighten climactic plot sequences too. Don’t simply write “the dragon reared up and spewed fire, destroying the castle.” Slow the action down with precise, focused details about the individual sights, scents, and sounds:
First came the sulfurous stench, like a dozen lit matches held to my nose. Then the dragon’s impossibly wide jaws unhinged, those dagger fangs slick with greenish drool. A subterranean rumble built somewhere deep inside that mammoth scaled belly, growing louder until the castle walls trembled…
Such visceral sensory insights make the reader feel like they’re right there on the smoking battlefield. We’re able to picture the dragon through its individual features rather than as a vague, mythical outline. The rhythm of the prose builds that unbearable tension as the inevitability of the fire blast ramps up.
Precise descriptors and well-observed details enable readers to construct every new setting or character in their imagination piece by piece. So make the habit of paying attention to your own surroundings and jotting down those little sensory nuggets that bring a scene to life:
The air smelled of damp wool and Player’s Navy Cut cigarettes… The velvet chair’s nap was crushed where she gripped the armrests… Threads of cirrus clouds unraveled across the morning sky…
In this way, you “show” your fictional worlds rather than blankly stating them. Because anything you can experience through sight, sound, touch, smell, or taste can become a vivid, immersive storytelling tool when rendered in concrete specifics.
“But what about abstract concepts and internal experiences that have no sights or sounds?” you might be asking. Emotions, dreams, anxiety – how does one show something that is fundamentally invisible?
This is where more subtle physical tics, gestures, and inner monologue become crucial tools in a writer’s “show, don’t tell” arsenal. For example, rather than flatly telling readers “Susan felt anxious,” try revealing her anxiety through outward behaviors and thought patterns that suggest it:
Susan smoothed the front of her blouse for the tenth time, her gaze flicking between the still mirror and the ever-shifting crowd beyond reception’s tall windows. There were so many strangers’ faces. Sure, she’d prepared for this conference a thousand times over the past few weeks. But preparing was the easy part. What if she choked on her opening lines? What if they asked some obscure question she didn’t have an answer for? Her stomach muscles tightened into a tiny knot…
See how the small physical details—smoothing her blouse, her darting gaze, her tensing gut—all coalesce into the picture of someone feeling nervous? Nothing is stated outright, but the impression of Susan’s anxiety still comes through loud and clear.
This indirect, suggestive approach is the essence of what “show, don’t tell” enables. Any feeling or complex inner state can be evoked by laying out all the real-world clues and behavioral breadcrumbs, allowing readers to intuit its existence for themselves rather than having it spelled out for them. There’s an inherent power in that subtlety.
Wait, I Still Need to Tell Sometimes…Right?
Now that we’ve explored how to “show” using descriptive sensory details, behavioral cues, and indirect inner glimpses, I can hear some of you getting nervous:
“Are you saying I can’t use ANY direct statements about a character’s thoughts, feelings or backstory? That I can never just come out and state things directly? Surely there’s a balance to strike between showing and telling!”
And you’re absolutely right to raise that concern. While we’re emphasizing the inherent advantages of “showing” over “telling” here, it would be far too draconian to totally eliminate the latter from your writing toolbox. There’s certainly still a place for some occasional judicious telling, especially for the sake of efficiency.
Think about it: if every single one of your character’s emotions and motivations had to be painstakingly shown rather than stated, your plots would start to move at a glacial pace.
Billie sighed, shoving a loose tendril of hair back from her face. Why did she even agree to go on this blind date? The groan that escaped her lips said it all. She was, quite simply, sick of Chad setting her up with yet another boring finance guy…
While all that physical narration conveys Billie’s reluctance, it bogs down the action in unnecessary detail. A tighter version might read:
Billie dreaded yet another one of Chad’s boring blind dates with some finance guy who’d no doubt bore her to tears.
See how that one short sentence moves us more quickly into the heart of the action? Sometimes a spare line or two of direct “telling” is simply a more efficient way to get a minor point across before segueing into a new scene.
The same goes for establishing backstories, settings, and other contextual givens about your fictional world. Yes, by all means, dive into lush “showing” wherever key emotional or suspenseful moments demand it.
But for laying factual groundwork a reader needs to know up front, it’s perfectly fine to make declarative statements:
Michael had known Samantha since their days at university, long before her invention of the world’s first molecular 3D printer made her a billionaire. So when she rang his ancient Brooklyn landline…
That kind of quick telling eliminates the need for clunky flashbacks or overstuffed biography explanations. The writer can sum up critical background in a few concise lines, then springboard into the meaty stuff worth going into more vivid, indirect detail about.
And let’s not forget that for certain famous authors, the very strength of their unique voice lies in an unshakeable commitment to direct telling. A Cormac McCarthy novel stripped of its searing declarative style would cease being a Cormac McCarthy novel altogether. Those potent terse sentences burn themselves into the reader’s mind in a way suggestive, flowery prose never could.
So yes, telling still plays an important supporting role even within a showing-dominated narrative. The key lies in using that mode sparingly, perhaps opening scenes with short bursts of context-setting while reserving the bulk of your descriptive muscle for the moments that most warrant shimmering, sensory, experiential writing.
The truth is, learning the art of showing isn’t like suddenly flipping a binary switch in your brain. It’s an ongoing process of calibrating your personal storytelling style to make optimal use of both showing and telling in the service of sculpting the most compelling narrative possible.
Using “Showing” to Transform Your Writing
The principle of “show don’t tell” is one of those enduring pieces of writing advice for a reason – it jolts stories to life, heightening the reader’s emotional investment and forging a truly immersive experience.
But as we’ve explored, this master technique is ultimately far more nuanced than a simplistic show vs. tell binary. Cultivating your own approach to “showing” will require ongoing practice and sharpening of skills like:
- Crafting razor-sharp sensory descriptions to ground scenes in immediate physical reality
- Revealing characters’ internal states through judicious use of behavioral signals, gestures, and fleeting glimpses of their private interior thoughts
- Finding the right balance between “showing” active scenes through urgent, present-tense details and “telling” background information or transitions in a clear, direct style
- Maintaining a keen eye toward the subtleties of real-life human experience, capturing the seemingly insignificant physical cues that define our inner landscapes
- Developing an intuitive feel for when concise “told” summaries serve the narrative better than over-described “showpiece” scenes.
Ultimately, total mastery of “show, don’t tell” comes down to always striving to put readers in the midst of whatever pivotal action or emotional undercurrent is unfolding.
To reinforce the distinction, try this exercise with some of your own writing: Go through a paragraph and underline every instance of telling in one color, and every instance of showing in another. Look for areas where sentences are weighed down with abstract statements of thoughts or emotions. Could those be reimagined using more experiential details? Or are there places where too much scene-setting lags the pace where a single line of efficient telling might better move things along?
Becoming adept at showing requires you to think more cinematically, zooming your mind’s eye in for ultra-crisp close-ups at the climactic high points while keeping the transitions between scenes clear and succinct. You want to put every beat of action, every bead of sweat on your character’s furrowed brow right in your reader’s own imagination.
Because at the end of the day, that’s the magic at the heart of unforgettable storytelling. When you show, you allow your audience to live and breathe that fiction as if it were their own reality. You usher them through the looking glass into a world they experience as vibrantly as the one they inhabit every day.
And that is how your writing transforms from a simple recounting of events into an extraordinary immersive journey that will linger with readers long after they’ve turned the final page.